that-one story

[that-one-guy]

Any questions, suggestions or criticisms are welcome.

[Sniper014]

Ok. Found the link to your forum.

Great story. Love cliffhangers. Need to see next chapter to see if she makes it or not.

You are learning from the master cliffhanger (Magus) in leaving your readers wanting more. Just do not leave us hanging to long or we will move on to other writers on this site.

To many stories are left undone or listed as completed and the story had no ending to it when it was stopped.

Please continue the story so we know what happens to her sister.

[that-one-guy]

Dont worry, I plan on continuing it. Sister sister is going to be my main story for a while, keeping time to fight back of the backburner. I plan on getting a good chunk writen this weekend, I prefer to give myself time to think about what happens next so unfortunately for some of you, I already know what my next cliffhanger will be(kind of, I have to options floating around in my noggin). And if you ever get desperate for a new chapter, just nag. I procrastinate too much anyway

[GEMINI]

I agree with sniper, great story, can't wait to see how it turns out. As always love cliffhangers

[that-one-guy]

Thanks, in all honesty I probably would have chapter 3 done by now, I had alot of extra time on tuesday that I could have spent writing, only problem was I screwed my arms up on sunday during a workout and could barely move them. but their fine now and im definately writing this weekend

[Guest wolf7700]

Great story I like it keep it up! Waiting for the next chapter to see if she makes it or not.

[angeldust]

and I like it too.

[Hundybuns]

Hi, I just caught your link in Magus' forum and just finished reading your chapters. I have to say excellent work, can't wait for the next chapter. Keep up the good work.

[that-one-guy]

Thanks

[that-one-guy]

Got the first two pages written, not as much as I would have liked but procrastination is a bastard

Edited December 7, 2014 by that-one-guy

[BigMan7307]

My problem is when you kind of advertise your story on another person's feed, then have done nothing with it. If you're going to update, at least let us know a ball park figure on time, or don't try to direct traffic to yours without doing anything with them. Your stories have been here a while, and you've done nothing on them. It's been a week since you've even posted in here that you were going to update, either update or stop and just let them go. I do understand that life happens, but, you seem to not even be trying on them. It seems like the only reason you posted in that feed was to give us a link to two dead end stories that you have not thoughts of even trying.

[that-one-guy]

I actually hope to have it finished this weekwnd, would have finished it during the week but exam revison and coursework have monopoloized my time with how close we are to the holidays

[that-one-guy]

Ok so ive got the first half written, but I cant start the next half until ive decided on an ending, I have two in mind so ill decide by tomorrow.

[that-one-guy]

Just thought of a way to continue one of the endings, ill try to finish it tonight, might not be as long as the last one though

[that-one-guy]

ok, next chapters up. apologese for the wait. its not quite as long as chapter two. and i already have a good chunk of chapter 3 planned out. i should be done before christmas.

[magusfang]

Ohhhh, I've been waiting to use this one... TOO SHORT!

I get that all the time

[that-one-guy]

I did have it a bit longer but changed the ending so I had to remove a scene to make it work

[Guest wolf7700]

It was a great chapter liked it a lot I am with magus though it was to short

[magusfang]

I find that about ten thousand words stops the short complaint...then there's just the hurry up and post the next chapter complaint

[BigMan7307]

Sadly, the "hurry up and post" would happen if you posted 10 chapters a day, so just write at your pace and make things work for you. I don't mind delays in posting, real life happens a lot of the time to all of us.

I can only imagine the 500 questions that she's going to get from her parents after seeing them kiss, the good part is that the parent's don't seem overly uptight, so it will be interesting to see where it all leads.

[that-one-guy]

I already have a plan for that, and how gemma will recover, and a little suprise that magus gave me the idea for

[BigMan7307]

Uh oh... if it came from Magus, be careful, lol. You've seen how convoluted his ideas can be. I mean, I think most of the plans in his stories he tags as "Amy's" but, they're stripped down versions of his own plans. He does it to confuse us.

Again, I do love where this is headed, and hopefully life will settle down a little for you so you can put a few more chapters in the book.

[that-one-guy]

Fridays last day of school before the holidays so I want to make chapter 4 as long as possible. And dont worry, its not that crazy of an idea, its one of his tamer ones

[BigMan7307]

Always a good thing, just remember his tame are crazy according to most other people, but, you both are keeping us guessing what will happen, so it's a good thing

[that-one-guy]

Most people sure, but his fanbase are adapted to the crazy, we frequently read about a story that involves androids, cyborgs, a teen genius with a harem, and AI controlled robots that vary from huge warmachines to tiny medical assisstants. I think were used to crazy.